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drunk

posted September 1, 2006 - 11:39pm
drunk

I’ll love you forever
She states through the glass
Crimson and bold
A taste everlasting
by her side through
the pain
not playing no game
I wish I could
Save her
Hold her hand tight
All my might
Promise
She’ll be alright
But my mind
I get fuzzy
My emotions
all clutsy
as I slide into bed
my thoughts all dead
Soothing the noise
Forgetting the boy
The man of my life
His struggle
His strife
His wife

Author: ckb5
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Drunk Is Goooood

Antonia Dwells - Sat, 2006-2-9 10:01 am
Yes, it can be taken a couple different ways. In one of them "Not playing no games" seems to work, because that's how a drunk might talk. In another read, she's the drunk the speaker's trying to protect...maybe from the drink.

Antonia Dwells

I like that this is a poem

John Minstral - Sat, 2006-2-9 9:38 am
I like that this is a poem that keeps you guessing. First I read the title "drunk" and expected to hear about being inebriated, then I found that the word drunk was about the addiction of love. Then I could see how "drunk" was truly the best title, because of the low that accompanies seeing your love with someone else. I enjoyed it. The only thing I didn't like was the awkward wording of "not playing no game." But, on the other hand the awkwardness of that line shows the awkwardness of the situation, so I wouldn't want you to change it.

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