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Enter the Errant but Gallant Knight

posted April 7, 2009 - 10:09pm
Enter the Errant but Gallant Knight

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The sound of a song being whistled echoed through the great forest that encompassed nearly the entire length of a well maintained trade road. To one moderately traveled, it would be recognized as one of many raucous tavern side diddies sung across the berth of the Northern Reaches, never mind the lack of words.

A late season merchant's wagon galloped due north along the eastern lane. This Hebron trader risked running snow blind if he was importing anything farther than a months gallop at his current speed. At least they never worried about brigands. Besides, the extra coin from late season produce and other specialized items would be pure gold with the current market, he wagered. Nothing really to worry about since the cart was led by four shaggy draft horses.

The Merchant didn't wave to or hear the whistler who deftly guided an ebony Walker stallion to the side, neither losing their rhythm. Both travelers continued along their paths as they were. Weather besides northern snows, was mostly calm year round. The Middle Kingdoms didn't get the brunt of the wests' monsoons that would come after the snow's of the north.

Now, stallions can be an usually unwieldy lot, especially black ones. Something about the breeding of big black quarter horses seemed to lend a fierceness, usually culled with gelding. The whistler had no need of any gelding, much less for a steed. Whistler seemed clothed only in a giant brown cloak, covering any distinguishable markings but the jolly song upon his lips. The steed, while not the size of a usual warhorse, was well muscled and could outrun what he thought to be giant brutes any day. No one would suppose either a warrior or an easy target.

No sooner had they passed well within ear shot of each other's help, a crossbow bolt thudded into the ebony stallion's neck, just above the right shoulder. The horse's screams of painful rage immediately stopped the song. Nearly any other steed would have dropped face first into the baked track, usually breaking their front legs and or neck, and their rider's as well. It took a few split seconds for the whistler to leap, relieving a partner of lethal inertia. Rather than plummeting into the ground, the stallion slowed as much as he could, falling onto his left side, eyes rolling wildly.

Bandits rushed from the dense forest on all sides. Trained ears steered the leaping cloaked figure westerly, towards the sound of a cranking crossbow. Five of them: All so close. The closest rushing bandit was cut down from sternum to shoulder and slumped back into the brush. The tears from whistlers eyes didn't reach the ground in the time it took to avenge the steed, with a length of steel blurring through the sniper's neck. Three left.

The next closet blitzing assasin felt a wrist shatter, as he thrust a blade towards whistler's back. Before he could scream, a pommel slammed against the back of his head. The only thing the rushing bandit hit, was the ground. His rushing partner, 2 steps behind him fared, wasn't as lucky. A blindingly fast, flying knee, pushed the majority of his facial structure a few inches out of place.

The final standing assailant, taking aim with a short blowgun, stepped back withing lunging range of the horse. Giant white teeth tore into calf muscle as the whistler landed in the dirt, a foul smelling dart whizzing by the whistler's face. Screaming defiance at the steed for his maimed leg, the scum tried to crawl forth. Before he could thrust a blade into the stallion, a small screaming ball seemed to shoot from the Whistler's hand "Your lives' for my steed's" was the last thing he heard.

Weeping in painful rage, the whistler knelt immediately to the steed, sobbing a soft song to the animal, stroking its neck. Composing themselves, the whistler sang deeply, reaching into the earth and heavens, pleading with an Ancient Song. Green light surrounded the whistler's hands, streaks of blue light flashing out to the bodies of the would be murderers. Whistler's hands probed and caressed the wound as the bolt slid from the horses neck and blood gushed momentarily. The wound began to knit together under the grace of the healing lights.

The whistler sat soothing the stallion, lending strength to the animal for an hour or so before they stood. Sauntering down the path once more, the whistler patted the stallion's neck fondly, and started whistling a joyous tune.

Mr. X



Comments

never know ;)

I know what you mean :) Im so bad I was refering to a Chinese Lady as Mr. Xian :/ Make Money with Blogging! http://www.xomba.com/referral/77778956 www.xomba.com/user/mr_x

Gallant Knight

Although it is not specified, I have to admit I presumed the Whistler to be man. My reasons are personal perceptions and not anything you have written. Growing up on westerns, it is usually the "good cowboy" who saves the day and anyone knows that a real cowboy loves his horse more than his life! : ) I also associate whistling with the male gender even though I do know females who whistle, once again, it is the stigma of the western movies and shows. MJ - Sending happy thoughts and Smiles! Avatar: Betrayal and Retribution http://www.valkyrieart.com/Poser1.html

thanks again MJ!

I fixed some errors and appriciate the praise :D I have a lot of contect related to this story so i look forward to posting some very soon. Also, i tured to make Whistler non gender specific in this scene. Can you tell if they are women or man? Make Money with Blogging! http://www.xomba.com/referral/77778956 www.xomba.com/user/mr_x

Gallant Knight and Loved Steed

I like the healing description of the Knight for the Steed. Very nice. Patiently waiting for the next installment. : ) MJ - Sending happy thoughts and Smiles! Avatar: Betrayal and Retribution http://www.valkyrieart.com/Poser1.html

PLease Reread: Editted

PLease let me know your opinions :) New story coming soon! Catch the story as it unfolds on XOMBA!!!!! Make Money with Blogging! http://www.xomba.com/referral/77778956 www.xomba.com/user/mr_x

Gracias!

Thanks MJ! I lookforward to adding more soon.

Good start Mr.X

Very nice and thanks for the edit! :) I actually felt my blood start pumping a bit as I was readig and wanted more. As Wdzzz said and you agreed, there is a bit fuzzy transition going on, but for a rough draft, it works to excite. Looking forward to more. +1 MJ - Sending happy thoughts and Smiles! Avatar: Betrayal and Retribution http://www.valkyrieart.com/Poser1.html

Glad you liked it!

Thanks for the props! I shall be adding more as time goes by! I made a small edit just now to fix the mechanics. Awesome feedback on this site!

thanks again!

Wow! Thats a pretty crucial error! Changed! Thanks again for the proofread!

wow

that was a great story hope to see more. +1 James & Sherry Grimes

James & Sherry Grimes

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