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It Happened One Night…

posted September 22, 2008 - 9:51am
It Happened One Night…

Back in 1990, I stayed in a hostel in the college campus. The girls hostel was a multistory building with a high boundary wall that faced the main highway in the front and had a gate on the side that was kept locked at night. Behind the hostel, on the extreme right, was the morgue of the medical college and hospital surrounded by a thick jungle. There was no one living around in a radius of one kilometer. The area behind was generally dimly lit or at times even devoid of light altogether. “Rumor” had it that the hostel building was built on top of an old cemetery, which had been dug up during the construction process, causing the spirits to become homeless and restless - haunting the place.

The day was like any other day, sunny and bright. I went to college, as usual and everything went smoothly till lunchtime. It was during lunch that I noticed an air of excitement amongst my classmates. Curious to know what was going on, I interrupted my friend, Sandra and asked her, “Hey, what’s everyone getting so excited about, what’s happening?”
Sandra said, “ We (meaning the girls who were all day-scholars) have all planned to stay in the hostel tonight.”
I said, “Oh, and what’s the occasion?”
Sandra replied, “Well, we were talking about calling spirits with the planchette and somebody said, why not do it in the hostel. It would be exciting!”
“And you agreed?” I asked.
“Yes, I have been doing it at home too.” She replied
“Aren’t you scared? What if something went wrong?” I asked, with some concern. After all I was the one who stayed there every night.

To this she replied very confidently that nothing could go wrong if everyone in the room was a true believer. And that was the reason they had not invited me. Well, it was true that I did not believe in all this and anyway preferred to stay out of it. So, I said, “Oh, don’t mind me, you can go right ahead without me.”

And so it happened that night that the girls got together (minus me) in the room, which happened to be right below mine.

After an early dinner I went up to my room. Not having anything else to do, I decided to go to sleep, as I was quite tired. I climbed into bed and closed my eyes, trying to relax, when suddenly I remembered about the whole planchette thing that was happening right then just below my room. At that moment, I wasn’t particularly concerned, but just wondered, if they had started or not. Then, I decided that it was better if I locked myself in and made sure that I was thoroughly secure, before going to sleep…Just in case!

I got up and closed the window, which had a broken glass on one frame and I doubted it would keep anything out, least of all, lost spirits? I then drew the curtain, which also had a huge gaping hole right in the center, from the wear and tear through the years. Well, never mind, “something” was better than nothing. Then I locked the door of my room and put the mosquito net, to add to my security. Now, I was sure, nothing could get through. But, could you ever be sure with spirits? Weren’t they notoriously capable of getting anywhere, through any medium or material? Not a very comforting thought!

I switched off the lights, jumped into my bed and secured the net tight. Grabbing the blanket, I covered myself and got ready to sleep, finally! I soon drifted off with not very pleasant thoughts of lost, wandering spirits and haunted hostels. I don’t know for how long I'd slept, when suddenly I had a creepy feeling that somebody was looking, NO, “staring” at me from the window. Although I was not facing the window, I could positively “feel” that there was something or someone out there that was staring at me. I had goose pimples all over and felt cold with fear. Was I dreaming? I moved my hand ever so slightly and touched my fingers to each other to make sure. It was not a dream. I lay there on the bed unmoving, building up enough courage to turn and face the window.

After what seemed like an eternity, very slowly, I turned towards the window - a grotesque and shapeless face with huge red eyes was staring at me. I got a start. My heart jumped to my mouth and I stopped breathing. I closed my eyes for a second and then looked again at the window to be certain that I was not dreaming. But, this time there was nothing there.

My heart racing loudly now, I lay on my bed under the covers, sweating, and shaking with fear. It was dark in the room with shadows dancing in every nook and corner of it. To add to the misery I realized that the electric supply had failed. Not a sound was to be heard in the stillness of the night. Did I really see something or someone at the window? I couldn’t say for sure! But, I remembered the face very clearly. What was happening in the room below? What was the time? I had no idea.

I was just recovering my breath when, all of a sudden, there was a loud knock at my door. I nearly jumped out of my skin! Now, who could that be at this ungodly hour? I gathered my wits telling myself not to be silly, went to open the door. Just to reassure myself, I said loudly, “who’s there?” No answer. Now, I wondered, if it was wise to open the door. What if that same face was outside the door? Well, if I didn’t open the door, I would never know. So, praying under my breath, I opened the door slowly and peeked out. I was greeted by complete darkness in the corridor outside, nobody there. I looked again, all around to be sure, no, not a soul anywhere. All was quiet. Too quiet.

Was I turning into a nut case or what? I was positive that there had been a knock on the door. Just one Knock. But loud enough to have made me get up and look. So, what was happening? By this time, I was shaking like a leaf all over. I jumped back into my bed and tucked myself all over, trying to relax and get my senses back.

No sooner had I got my breath back to normal rhythm, I noticed a “tap, tap, tap” sound at the window. This time it was not loud, but very soft.

My heart flew out of my chest, and I jumped the roof. I did not dare to look at the window, but, closed my eyes tight and kept still. I prayed to God fervently and hoped that the lights would come back and the night would end soon. I didn’t want spirits floating around in my room! Now, I could hear the wind blowing outside making a wailing noise, like a banshee! The curtain in the room swayed with the breeze and a cold draft came in making me shiver with goose pimples all over my body.

The “tapping” sound stopped just as suddenly as it had started. Again, silence all around, except for the sound of the wind. But that was wind. I was sure. I couldn’t hear any other sounds, except for my loud breathing and heartbeat. I opened my eyes cautiously and looked around. My eyes went to the ceiling and there I saw a shapeless being (there’s no way to describe it) with a transparent body like jelly, looking down at me. It was glowing in the dark, that’s how I could see it. We stayed that way for a few seconds, not moving, looking at each other silently, as if weighing our options. And then, I screamed……..

Till date my friends keep asking me why I had screamed so loudly that night. I tell them, but no one believes me.



Comments

@rawnak--Loving This, Hopelessly; Echoes of The Raven

I AM the Raven http://is.gd/3krM and I remember that night ... it was good for me ... ---Buddha tells Uncle MythMan, "Flood the Open Eyes with the Truth, for as Long as You Exist!" Help Him Spread the Truth (about stuff) Here!

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@Mythman & Shawn

Thanks mythman, that was really sweet. :-)) and thanks to shawn too for reading my story and taking the time out for the "constructive criticism". I appreciate your inputs and have made some suitable changes (edited) here and there. I am glad that you liked the story. (however, I don't know if you voted for it, and so am wondering if you really liked it?)

Excellent, shawn.L, but rawnak Knows Where the Best Fiction Lies

The best fiction lies in the human mind ... in the imaginings of what the young medical student KNOWS is on the other side of the door, drifting like a light murky fog. You could say the grammatical plainness (though I'm sure it could also be due to a 'rush to finish' or something) was a 'realism effect' like in that one horror-movie (and a few since) that were done on 'home video-cameras,' giving it an 'as if it were you'-feeling. But it's good that we can count on you for comment on the dramatic effects of punctuation! ---Buddha tells Uncle MythMan, "Flood the Open Eyes with the Truth, for as Long as You Exist!" Help Him Spread the Truth (about stuff) Here!

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Review: "It Happened One Night"

Your story sounds more like something that could have happened to you rather than a fictional tale. If it is true, You have survived a very frightening experience and seemed to have weathered it well. If this is a fictional story, you have a way of telling a tale that makes it seem real, which is a very good talent to have. I wish you success in the contest. Not knowing how serious a writer you are, I am do not know if you will take constructive criticism with grace. Still, perhaps you will not take offense. First, you need to work on your comma placement, correctly recognizing dependant clauses. You might also consider using dashes instead of commas when you are making an important point or want to emphasize a few words. You also need to choose your words with more care; you are using too many words to make your statements. The best example is in the sentence “I don’t know for how long I had been sleeping, When…”. “Had been sleeping” needs to be “I don’t know how long I’d slept”. It might help you edit if you read the story aloud to yourself or have someone you trust edit it. Your story is good, but it still needs some polishing. Your use of descriptive words is very well done, and I’d like to see some more instances of that. if you have the time, please read my own entry in the contest and give a review. ”THE SIGHT”: SPOOKY XOMBA SHORT STORY CONTEST ENTRY With respect, Lori of shawnandlori Want to visit my best bites and blurbs?: - LEARN MY WINNING SCRABBLE STRATEGIES: AN INDEPTH LOOK AT HOW TO WIN THE CLASSIC BOARD GAME - ESSAY ON THERAPEUTIC RIDING: HOW HORSES HELP PEOPLE WITH PHYSICAL AND EMOTIONAL DISABILITIES - COINCIDENCE AND DÉJÀ VU DISCUSSION BLOG: DESCRIBE YOUR EXPERIENCES AND GIVE YOUR THEORIES - “THERE’S A CAT IN THE WAY”: A POEM INSPIRED BY REAGANNE, MY CAT - VIEW A COLLECTION OF WEBSITES ON MCCAIN AND OBAMA TO LEARN THEIR VIEWS AND SEE THEIR PASSED VOTING RECORDS - HOW TO GET KIDS AND ADULTS TO EAT THEIR SPINACH: SPINACH CHEESE CASSEROLE - FIND OUT IF YOU HAVE THE INTELLIGENCE OF A LION, HYENA, GIRAFFE, GAZELLE, WILDEBEEST, KITE, OR MEERKAT BY ANSWERING THIS RIDDLE - A COLLECTION OF RESOURCES ON HURRICANE AND TROPICAL STORM EFFECTS, HISTORY, FORECASTING, AND PREPARATION

shawnandlori

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Was it good for you? It sho` was good for us! The way you described it, it's like we were actually there! ... I could feel the Spirits vibrating outside your door! ---Buddha tells Uncle MythMan, "Flood the Open Eyes with the Truth, for as Long as You Exist!" Help Him Spread the Truth (about stuff) Here!

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But Soft! What Light Upon that Dental Doctor Breaks? ... oh,just

rawnak ... well, at least there's gonna be sunrise ... probly ... Keep shinin` your light on the ghosties! ---Buddha tells Uncle MythMan, "Flood the Open Eyes with the Truth, for as Long as You Exist!" Help Him Spread the Truth (about stuff) Here!

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Thanks Champagnedreams

Its very encouraging. This is the first time that I am trying my hand at "fiction" writing!

Great Story

Really interesting.

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@ Mamamia

Yes, there were quite a few of those "terror" filled moments in the hostel. Today, the building lies vacant as a new hostel has been built elsewhere. And it has a real "haunted" dilapidated look at present. Whenever I happen to pass that building, I am amazed that we used to stay in it! And the best part is that I have managed to stay alone in my room for all those four years of college. My roomies were all day scholars and so they used to come only on special occasions, and even then, they used to end up spending the night in their friends rooms! Thanks for your comment.

Thats a creepy story

Reminds me when I used to sneak out of the room and go to my neighbour's room at hostel on terror filled nights, and in the process scare the wits out of her - even these days I am scared to sit alone in an empty room! I have never been rational about ghosts. Good for you, you survived! Latest Football News At http://www.plainfooty.blogspot.com/ My writings here My profile here My Xomba blog

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