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Mr.X:The Dark Ravine

posted April 7, 2009 - 11:50pm
Mr.X:The Dark Ravine

The Dark Ravine - Another super short story (Scene) from Mr. X
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I crouch like a chimp in the dark forested gully, feeling my way almost unconsciously along the slender elm and pine saplings that seem to be the predominate living things here. Darkness is permanently settled upon this place. Its ebony beauty shines with its own violet light. even my vision has taken on its purplish shining glow. "Is this place tainted or blessed?" I wonder absently. "Perversion, or natural?"

The Dark Ravine; Merely another of the myriad paths I traverse, stumble along, trespass upon... They're all the same to me now anyway. Other possible definitions of what i assume to be a quest, flash inside my head like lighning... there and gone again. Planeswalking, astral projection, dreams, perhaps even an after life... I shake my head "nothing more than my neurons firing." I think to myself.

Although feelings of dread batter fiercely against me, I just caulk it up to childhood fears of the dark and common sense. I grumble, almost arguing with myself. "Sensible people don't wander about in dark gullies searching for God knows what God knows where. Especially when a single slip, could mean a nasty but short roll, to a possibly long fall, most likely leading to something broken... like my neck!" But fear does not reach me. "Creator protect me."
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A short hammock of trees draws my curiosity closer. A rare opportunity for a rest gladly taken. Exhaling deeply and silently I scout the haven for hidden dangers. All seems well, just a copse of elm root-bothers stretching impatiently towards the top of the ebony canopy. More impressive though is the sinuous Dragonwood tree snaking among them. The slow growing Ash must be strong indeed to survive among the greedy semi-clones of these high rising elms, almost birch-like in their standings here.

The Dragonswood's bark hangs delicately from the twisted trunk, deceptively soft around the firmness of its heart. A work of art i think to myself as i touch the serrated skin softly, fine brownish red powder falling oh so softly to the dark forest floor. A work of art. A good omen.



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TY

Thank you Miss Sophia :) I am trying to make it seem almost like a dream.

Re: The Dark Ravine

I like the tone of it, dark and spooky, but not creepy. Plus the fact that the protagonist has admitted he doesn't know what he is doing there or what he is looking for opens the readers' minds for any possible situation. You must be a gardener, or at least someone who loves trees.

so true

even my professors say there nothing better than practice. Thanks for the add Wd! God Bless!

The more you write the easier it gets,

plus I have a great editor, my wife. Except I like to still start off almost every paragraph with the word 'so.' But she says I am getting better. I still try to sneak one in now and again. hehehehehe. College writting classes helped me. Also the more I write on Xomba the better I seem to be able to write. Reading your story aloud to yourself can be a great way to edit. Reading one of your new articles to a loved one(s) for a bedtime story or after dinner entertainment can be wonderfully satisfying. For more articles by this author click here

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Namaste!

Once again I appriciate the feedback. Proper and clear punctuation is one of the many challenges I face in writing. I've been studying proper APA style writing in college and will edit this sometime in the future. I really must be off to bed soon though.

I am not

a fictional writer and find it very difficult to create a piece of fiction writing because it involves attention to detail. You have a very good flow for writing and you have the ability to draw people into your story through intrigue. But, you need to pay attention to the punctuation and grammar to convey the right expression or pause...or whatever else it is that you wish to convey to the reader. Enjoyed reading this too.... Get money writing articles on Xomba Here

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